Peer review #3

Create a fourth section of your statement titled Learning Outcome 4. Review your feedback on the chosen Marked First Draft of One Peer’s Paper, in addition to any guidance offered by your instructor. Revisit your early efforts at peer review to help you think (and write) about your development. Write about your peer review practice, making sure to explain how specific examples of your comments show your achievement of this learning outcome and any ongoing areas for growth (about 150-450 words).

In my peer review I made comments on good things but also on parts where I thought changes could be made. I never practiced peer review in high school so English 110 is the first time I had to go through it. I started English 110 only knowing how to make local revision like fixing spelling and small sentence corrections. As you can see in my latest annotations I have moved on to focus on global revisions. In this peer review, I did this by giving suggestions that would help my peer’s paper. This was a paper about the addition of art in education could help children with other things. One comment I gave said to my peer that “you could give examples of skills that the art department could give like being creative and having critical thinking or having an outlet where they are safe.” This was specific to my peer’s paper and it helped them because I included things that were not just local. Instead of continuing with the thesis and repeating it in paragraphs this helped open up my peer’s points. Another example of how I look deeper into the text is when I pointed out when my peer was began talking about divorce. I commented that “this divorce connects with your claim but in this paragraph, this is the first I am seeing it. You could always add it up top and say students who are going through things like divorcing parents would especially enjoy art and music classes because it gives them opportunities to use imagination and keep their mind on other things.” In this, I thought about the global revisions that my peer could make, because I provided a way for their paper to connect. I said how they could rearrange their paragraph so it is easier to understand and add some great points in the first part of their essay.