• Revisit your early work and review your approach to revising early in the term and compare changes between your first and final draft of your chosen Significant Writing Project as you prepare to write a section of your statement titled Learning Outcome 1. In that section, explain how you have made specific changes that demonstrate your ability to engage in both global and local revision (about 200-450 words). What does this show you about your development? You will likely draw from the ways your class has discussed revision.

In my narrative story essay, I was passionate about what I was writing about. As I compared my first and final draft I noticed that there were not a lot of changes, but the changes that were there work best for me. I made specific changes that demonstrated my ability to make both global and local revisions. It may seem like there are more local revisions and that is because I am very proud of this piece because it was important to me. My global revisions do not involve switching up my whole paper but just pieces of paragraphs. In my first draft, I used language that was more vague. In order to change this pattern, I read through it revised it to help my words flow better. I liked how my ideas were set overall up so most of my revisions involve switching up sentences. I wanted my piece to be personal and important. In my first paragraph, a part that I changed was a part that said “It all comes back to thinking about what people think of you, as you build your stories and as they become your life story. My narrative story is my own story formed by other people’s opinions.” This sentence is not very specific and as a reader, you lose track of what is being talked about. I changed it into “I tell my life story the way I want to remember it and how I want others to remember it. My narrative story is my own story formed by other people’s influences throughout my lifetime. Narrative stories grow as you get older from the surroundings you are thrown into.” As you can see in the second blurb I sound more passionate and descriptive. Even though I did not change the whole paragraph, that small incision made a large difference. I did this because my thesis is more apparent.